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What I live - Is more real then you'd ever dream

Hehe, cute poem! :D But one question... marshmallow peeps? Isn't that a candy for Easter instead of St. Valentine's Day? Or did the Peeps company expand to give out heart-shaped ...

Hey Matt! :D It seems like in your poem you use lots of repetition and such of the same image over and over again. But this can get rather boring. ...

Hey lonewolf! Welcome to YWS! :D Your script is a little short and rather disconnected, which may explain why your filming was interrupted constantly! Try lengthening it up and giving ...

Hi Mrs. Chaos! Welcome to YWS! :D So You started on a pretty interesting note! They were obviously very uncomfortable with each other, and that sort of conflict is pretty ...

Hahaha! What an interesting story! Definitely didn't suspect that ending! Now, one thing... the ending is a little confusing because it doesn't really make it clear who he's fantasizing over... ...

Hey emmylou! :D So! You started off with a lot of action, which was really really cool! I mean, come on... somebody getting branded? How much more awesome could you ...

Hey snickerdooly! Your name is sooooo cute. I mean it! :D Okay, now on with the review! What I kept on wondering when I read this piece was, "Why would ...

Emily! I never knew you wrote poetry. :D Okay! So your poem... at first I thought you were talking about what would happen in real life and stuff, but then ...

I checked this, mostly to see if the rating (18) was correct, but I have to say... your rape scene is awful. No description, no passion. It falls flat on ...

There are typos! Correct them when you get up. :) The main comment is know you're reader. If you want to make us read it, make it interesting to us! ...

Hey Clan! Welcome to YWS! :D I had a feeling that this was going to be a religious poem, but I kind of wondered at the message. It seemed like ...

This reminds me of an exercise that we did in my physics class... the question was whether it was gravity or love that drew people together. And yes, we did ...

Haha, actually, this was pretty funny! In a weird way, of course, but still! I think that the narrator would notice what the head looked like more. When I was ...

Oh, nice! I like how you used all the senses in order to give a clear picture as to what is beautiful... it really helped give the poem a real ...