Snoink

Hey Unknown! The main problem is that this pretends to be witty when it really isn't. Better poets have constructed her crazier un-poems than this with more imagination and daring ...

Hey Darkangel! :D So! I think you rushed this a bit too much and that's why you're not satisfied with it. I mean, you meet the guy, you meet Jennifer, ...

Eek! I love super human stories! You're a good writer too, which makes it even better! :D First of all, modly stuff! That is, I'm a mod. I rated it ...

I thought this was quick... maybe a bit too quick! I would like you to describe the SPEW Snoink more... it's quite a pleasant place, actually. And I would definitely ...

*flails in awesomeitude, if that is really a word* This is going to be neat to listen to! Our moderating staff has good music choices. Especially JabberHut! Really... Cruella d'Ville? ...

Hey Faded! First of all, I think you have a couple of typos in here! You repeat "rejiment" several times, but I think it should be "regiment." And then you ...

Hey Dalliance! Welcome to YWS! :D A very quick work that you've done, so this is going to be a very quick critique. ;) The main thing is that the ...

Mysteries = awesome. I think, however, that I would like less contradictions and more conflict... just dive into the plot! I think it'll be a much better hook than this, ...

Hey KittyKat! :D This is just me, but I would really like to see you describe the black hole. I'm kind of a science geek, so I would really love ...

Hey GoldenQuill! This might just be me, but you have a lot of imagining, but nothing really else. Which is kind of weird! I'm trained to be an engineer, so ...

Hey Demoness! First of all, I found this very repetitious. But I think that was your intention. Still, I didn't quite find your imagery really grabbing... you talked about the ...

Hey Risfel! First, a grammatical comment! You do what I do! You skip words. For instance: "Now go forth....and let them [ahh, where's the verb????] that you are my horror ...

Why would he indeed! If I were a dragon, I would only eat her if I had a large quantity of teriyaki sauce. Yum! Anyway, first of all, you need ...

Aww, and I really wanted to look at this poem too! :) Aristotle, we don't allow uploads of powerpoints and we won't see powerpoints either! Try converting it to PDF. ...

Teehee, yes, but what does that mean, if it doesn't mean anything? ;) Anyway, you're repeating the same structure again and again in your short couplets! This is good... if ...