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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Grade School

    Dear NovemberNovelist, I am going to give you a very important tip that will help you VERY much throughout your time here on YWS. It is not the best idea ...

    Dec 31, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Hollow Bones

    Dear Persephoneia, That poem was absolutely wonderful. You have SO much potential! You used wonderful vocab which I am always a big fan of. Really, I just can't find the ...

    Dec 31, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Earth

    Ok, let me just say that I really liked the meaning of the poem, but I didn't like the poem. It was much too short for such a large concept. ...

    Dec 31, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Moon

    I'm very excited to be your reviewer today! A sliver of silver, a river of light. I just loved those 2 opening statements. Very well done! Cascading down my bed ...

    Dec 30, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Look At Me

    Very excited to be your reviewer today! Look at me.Tell me what you see. I am thin. I’m not the guy who’d always grin. I feel like you could have ...

    Dec 30, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Tree

    Very nice poem! I LOVE the point you made, although at the end of the poem instead of saying "Each an innocent life taken for what,A simple tree?" I would ...

    Dec 30, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Stuff

    Oh my! That poem is just too cute! I can relate to every single line of it. I actually prefer simple, funny poems like this as opposed to long, strongly ...

    Dec 30, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Dog and Me

    This was a very nice poem indeed. You expressed your feelings in a way that lets anyone with a dog relate to you. I could relate, but more with my ...

    Dec 30, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Masquerade of Patriotism

    Wow! this poem was VERY nice! You were able to use complicated words but not overdo your gift of words. The rhyme and rhythm you used made the poem easy ...

    Nov 21, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: I have darkness in my veins.

    Wow! Very nice poem! I could really feel the power behind it! My only suggestion is that for your next poem, don't make it all one big sentence with a ...

    Nov 15, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Pretending

    The only thing i would change is when you are continuing a sentence in the next line, use commas to show people that it is the same thought. Some people ...

    Nov 14, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Dreaming By The Window (short story)

    Hello! I thought your story was very good, but the thing that really ruined it for me was your choice of wors to describe the "creepy creature". The use of ...

    Nov 14, 2010


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