SkyeWriter7

Thanks to all commenters and you guys gave me much to think about. :D I shall try to develop this.

It's quite good. Some of the rhythm is a little off (Father look at me- you might want to place another 'father') but overall I loved it.

I like it. It reminds me of 'Nobody' by Emily Dickinson... I assume that was what you were aiming for, right? I liked the rhythm and the last stanza.

I loved it. It was original, descriptive, and peaceful. I had a great image in my mind of where you were and I liked the way you conveyed your thoughts. ...