I'm Sorry, I Have Lost My Mind

Oh my gosh! Ya soshla s uma is one of the songs I love! All the things she said in English. I've listened to both, like you said, back in the day!

I really like what you done here, I like how you've included the lyrics in your poem but I think you could make it more original - like avoid using the lyrics so much. Let me highlight how many times you included their lyrics in your poem:

I see you looking at me, as in 'Mother/Father looking at me...
Puzzled. I know.
I’m not surprised, I’ve seen that look before.
Pray tell me what do you see?
Smeared make-up and racoon eyes,
Yes I have lost my mind.
Ya soshla s uma.

I just want to be free,
Without this smothering misery.
Maybe I’ve crossed the line,
Was there even a line to cross?
I don’t remember.
Yes I have lost my mind.
Gomenasai.

Wheezing from the running
But how could I have been? Where could I have gone?
Because all this while I’ve been standing still.
And if I'm begging for assistance it's only because
I feel thoroughly lost.
I’m racking my mind, wondering how
I keep closing my eyes
But I can’t shut her out.
She seems to float on the surface of my lids,
She’s here and she haunts
Every crevice in my dreams.
And inside she taunts the exterior of my crust.
I want to go, get away from it all
Soar to a place where it’s only me, just me.
Nobody else so I can be free 'nobody else, so we can be free...'
Yes I have lost my mind
Gomenasai
Ya soshla s uma.

I like this stanza a lot! Maybe because it doesn't contain too much of Tatu's lyrics. But mostly because of the emotion your narrator brings out. Her tone and voice are just so... bone-chilling. That's it, yeah. They're kind of freaky. Love it. I especially love how we are left wondering who 'she' is (as in the 'she' the narrator is referring to).

I'm feeling so small, so confronted and dashed
Maybe I’m at fault but I hate her so much
I just want to jet away
Somewhere the sea and rain
Can wash away all my pain.
And when they stop to stare
I won’t have a care
I’ll just try to pretend, just fail to recall
But it's driving me mad,
I am going insane.
Gomenasai.
Ya soshla s uma.

Mother dearest look at me You're a really smart kid, huh? Haha you turned it from 'Mother, looking at me...' to this. but that's okay.
Tell me what do you see?
The same little girl you held? The same baby you cradled?
Is she there? In my eyes is she there?
Father look at me same goes here.
Will I ever be free?
From this thing? This person taking control of me?
They’ve locked me up,
And thrown away the key.
And in this strait jacket my arms are held,
Will I ever be free?
It’s all her fault,
Don’t you see? It was her, not me!
And I scream and I struggle but it is no use
I can never be me again, she again
Has won. And they think she is me.
They tell me I have lost my mind but I haven’t
I haven’t, I swear!!
Disbelief pools their eyes, and there’s nothing else to say
I whisper
“Gomenasai, ya soshla s uma” Wow, two different languages in one sentence!
As they walk away.

It's quite good. Some of the rhythm is a little off (Father look at me- you might want to place another 'father') but overall I loved it.

This was lovely. And not just because this includes all three of my most favorite languages ever, but because it was the first work I've read here, and an impressive one at that.

In a few places I noticed commas were missing, but if you decided to do that to preserve the rhythm, then I'm not going to complain. (I wish there were favorite folders here, this'd be in there, honest.)

Keep writing, and tell me if you decide to polish this (I quote: five minutes back?). I want to read that too.
- Alex