Something

I have a something.
Do you have a something?
My something is cooler than yours.

You think I am childish!
You across the street,
Do you think I am childish too?

You do!
Well I am not that surprised.
My mom does too.

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turtlethatroars
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As everyone eles says I think it is funny too. your something might be cooler than mine but, it doesn't work as well. haha I am funny. I haven't met your mom but I have to agree with her %99.9

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tinkembell
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hehe, I liked this, I think it has a sort of nursery rhyme feel, but at the same time, it's older than that. It made me laugh too.

My only nitpicks would be that it's too short for my liking, I think it has a bit more potential, and you could make it funnier.

Also, there isn't very much flow, for a poem, giving that it doesn't really rhyme, you should get rid of the full stops and put commas instead, then it would be much better.

Keep up the writing!

~Tinkem :)

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klemieux51 Review

i like your poem.. i can picture this image in my mind of you reading it tro me the first time you read it to me in class... and i always laugh...
keep writting
~klemieux51 :)

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Kuyoko Comment

Heh heh, I liked the ending. xD It made me giggle.

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SkyeWriter7 Comment

I like it. It reminds me of 'Nobody' by Emily Dickinson... I assume that was what you were aiming for, right? I liked the rhythm and the last stanza.

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tashalovesyou Review

I have a something.Do you have a something?My something is cooler than yours.You think I am childish!You across the street, Do you think I am childish too?You do!Well I am not that surprised.My mom does too.


I know are childish. 'cause we go the same school and are really good friends. Plus i am not across the street.



People say I love you all the time - when they say, ‘take an umbrella, it’s raining,’ or ‘hurry back,’ or even ‘watch out, you’ll break your neck.’ There are hundreds of ways of wording it - you just have to listen for it, my dear.
— John Patrick, The Curious Savage