Skydreamer

Hiya! This is something I noticed about the start though, the sentence “Although he was in a crowd, he still felt so alone. This feeling of loneliness only made him ...

Hiya! So, I want to say good effort! I really like your idea of your character having to go to a prestigious school that their parent is the principal of, ...

Hiya! First off I would start with, great job spacing! It was easy to read the whole thing steadily. And actually you had a good tone throughout as well. My ...

Hiya! I like how you started out very much ""What if I told you I loved you?" Eyes to the floor." I thought that was good, the problem though is ...

Hiya! I love your story! It was so cute! I do agree with wonderland that it moved a little fast, but I almost don't see it with the way it ...

Hiya! :D Okkkayy...so. This is a very, emotion filled story, no? I believe so, and I am guessing that you really wanted to portray some emotion through the story, and ...

Wow this is really good! I think that you did a really amazing job! It has good rhymes and when the rhymes aren't there it has a good rhythm. So, ...

I have not read the original version or previous versions, but I am soo interested with this first Chapter. From the moment it started with him walking in the rain, ...

Wow! This is really good! I especially liked all the metaphor's you put. And the way your work flowed was exceptional!! You should be really proud of it. I'm sorry ...

GREAT ONE!!!! I think this might be my favorite chapter! :D I mean, the ways you portrayed King and Charlie. And I like how Maggie doesn't like King yet, but ...

WOW! Some of it is confusing to me, and strange, but it is amazing! The feel of it is amazing! I mean, the way that you just brought forth the ...

VERY WELL WRITTEN!!! I just want to point out the mistakes in your last paragraph though, This essence of being a child made Arabella smiled. I believe it should be, ...

Wow. Very jumbled. Interesting though! It was interesting, and I think you had a great point there but there were some mistakes Even on the best of days, Ms Carol ...

Really good ending to the chapter! It sends a message! And about the preivous correction on this I seriously hope the thinks I’m just clumsy. I think you either meant ...

I have three words as well, it's a shame. It's a shame that you don't have mounds and mounds of reviews saying how good your work is! You're excellent! Fantastic!! ...