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.....that was, well i actaully read the whole thing with no skimming which says alot since i almost never read the whole thing when its that long and its poetry, ...

Well first off i am not very good at commenting on anything, let alone poetry, but its defiantly interesting. hmm well as i read through all the other comments i ...

As i have said a few times before, i love your writing, i have been busy so have missed a bit but i will hopefully get a chance to read ...

First off i still love the characters and the story, but just one thing, the gypsies go from revengful and angry at what happened to suddenly seeing compassion ect for ...

i like it, i dont have anything to add that others have not already said, so i will just say, it looks good, even for jsut a short piece, i ...

I loved it, i was at a loss for words, i thougth it was brilliant. I have nothing to add to what any of the other people have said, any ...

I love your writing. I dont have any comments to make about grammer or corrections or anyhting, Myth does a good job of going through it. But really it is ...

I think your basic story line is great, there are some parts i think you breezed through and should of elaborated on, but mostly ti all holds together well, you ...

It was good Lan, well layed out, made it easier to read. the story line looks good, you give the readers enough so that they will want to read more ...

its looks good, except for a few things. *I had worried. I had fretted, lost sleep, worried helplessly * worried is used twice. *But that seems to have only fed ...

hey i am not very good at commenting on peoples work, but here goes. You tell too much, you should let the reader see it for themselves. example. "The heap ...

WOW, I just read the story from chapter one to twelve. That is a great piece of writing, you have written it to perfection, apart from the mistakes that Myth ...

I thought the dialog was very well writen, giving the characters personality and setting them apart. Having a description of what they looked like and the settings they were in ...