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Re: "I read"
I really liked this. I could feel how Mel felt the whole and I was amazed at your description of the school systems. I liked how you used capitalization in ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: Sickroom #2
Hey, nice work! This feels... incomplete though. I feel like you need more grief- your main characters lost her parents and sister and everyone and now all she can really ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: What Must be Learned- Chapter One
Wow. That was intense. I really liked your work and it had a very authentic sort of feeling- I could tell you really cared about Chester and Iggy. All I ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: stupid secrets
I really like your poem with the repetition of "I'm sorry" at the end of every stanza- it had a really raw, emotional feeling to it. I would break up ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Upon Seeing a Photograph of the Parthenon
I loved this poem. I shall start with the first thing I loved... - I though in the first stanza... "moths to a light really?" but then I saw how ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Becoming Genesee's Child
My review is going to be so lame after canislupis's but here goes... THAT WAS AWESOME! Really, I liked it a lot. I mean, the beginning was a little awkward ...
May 31, 2010 -
Re: To My Aunt
Wow. I don't really read much poetry but I happened across this and I read and I am glad I did. This is really, absolutely, and utterly fantastic. I'm sorry ...
May 29, 2010 -
Re: Into the Depths Chapter 2
That was like reading something professional! I guess I probably should have read the first chapter first but all in good time. All I would add is to describe Isabelle's ...
May 29, 2010 -
Re: The City Below: Chapter One
This has huge potential! I feel like with some lengthening you will have a great opening to an engaging book. Add some more details about Luna, her family, the Scouts, ...
May 29, 2010 -
Re: The Dragon.
I think is really adorable and rhythmical. The whole time I was reading it I could just feel the way everything flowed. After reading all the other posts on this ...
May 29, 2010 -
Re: Not quite alone
That was really... chilling. But in an amazingly well written way- I want to see more of your work because that was really excellent! One thing though, how would you ...
May 29, 2010 -
Re: Introduction - please give feedback
Wow. That was excellent- I can't wait for another chapter! I really heard the distinctive voice of Olivia and I could literally feel her emotions. The only thing i would ...
May 29, 2010 -
Re: The Curses of Elsa: a medeival 'witch girl'
I thought this was excellent and I guess whatever I say has sort of been said already. All I can say with out being redundant is I feel like this ...
May 28, 2010