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  • Short Story » General, General Re: "I read"

    I really liked this. I could feel how Mel felt the whole and I was amazed at your description of the school systems. I liked how you used capitalization in ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Sickroom #2

    Hey, nice work! This feels... incomplete though. I feel like you need more grief- your main characters lost her parents and sister and everyone and now all she can really ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: What Must be Learned- Chapter One

    Wow. That was intense. I really liked your work and it had a very authentic sort of feeling- I could tell you really cared about Chester and Iggy. All I ...

    Jun 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: stupid secrets

    I really like your poem with the repetition of "I'm sorry" at the end of every stanza- it had a really raw, emotional feeling to it. I would break up ...

    Jun 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Upon Seeing a Photograph of the Parthenon

    I loved this poem. I shall start with the first thing I loved... - I though in the first stanza... "moths to a light really?" but then I saw how ...

    Jun 1, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Becoming Genesee's Child

    My review is going to be so lame after canislupis's but here goes... THAT WAS AWESOME! Really, I liked it a lot. I mean, the beginning was a little awkward ...

    May 31, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: To My Aunt

    Wow. I don't really read much poetry but I happened across this and I read and I am glad I did. This is really, absolutely, and utterly fantastic. I'm sorry ...

    May 29, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Into the Depths Chapter 2

    That was like reading something professional! I guess I probably should have read the first chapter first but all in good time. All I would add is to describe Isabelle's ...

    May 29, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The City Below: Chapter One

    This has huge potential! I feel like with some lengthening you will have a great opening to an engaging book. Add some more details about Luna, her family, the Scouts, ...

    May 29, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Dragon.

    I think is really adorable and rhythmical. The whole time I was reading it I could just feel the way everything flowed. After reading all the other posts on this ...

    May 29, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Not quite alone

    That was really... chilling. But in an amazingly well written way- I want to see more of your work because that was really excellent! One thing though, how would you ...

    May 29, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Introduction - please give feedback

    Wow. That was excellent- I can't wait for another chapter! I really heard the distinctive voice of Olivia and I could literally feel her emotions. The only thing i would ...

    May 29, 2010
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: The Curses of Elsa: a medeival 'witch girl'

    I thought this was excellent and I guess whatever I say has sort of been said already. All I can say with out being redundant is I feel like this ...

    May 28, 2010


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