ShootingStars

Hi, Traveler! This is Shooting Stars here to review! Okey dokey I really like the concept and the way you tied in the water parts with the actual reading lines. ...

This is Shooting Stars as requested! For starters, the beginning didn't have very much power to it. Try adding a little more Umph to it. However, I felt the other ...

Noooo! OMG I was not expecting her mom to die... Ugh. *wipes tears out of her eyes* Yeah anyways I really liked this, but here's only two things I noticed: ...

Holy rainbows! You have a very talented voice! I love this song sooooo much. Have you ever considered American Idol? Well, if you live in America anyways... In my opinion ...

shooting Stars is back for a review! Wonderful job on this chapter! I honestly didn't find many mistAkes, except for what I mentioned on the last chapter about the commas ...

Hi, UpandOut! This is ShootingStars as requested here to review. :D First of all, I really like your descriptions and the way you put in the flashback when he's talking. ...

Hey, this is Shooting Stars here to review like asked! First of all, your opening line is AMAZING. It's short and sweet, but gets to the point and really makes ...

Hi, this is Shooting Stars like you requested! :D In the first few sentences, you grabbed me which is important so good job! I love your writing style but felt ...

Hey! This is Shooting Stars here to review! Here are just a few things you should look at: I looked around as much as I could from my prone position; ...

Hey! This is Shooting Stars here to review! Here's just a few things to think about: 1) When writing, the very first line is the most important. It sucks readers ...

Hey there, Whitney! This is Shooting Stars :D The beginning caught my attention which is good. I loved that you were writing to your best friend! However, I noticed a ...

Shooting Stars is here to review! :D Okay I really liked reading your poem, but noticed that you began rhyming then suddenly stopped. I don't know if you did this ...

Hi, I'm Shooting Stars ! I know I'm a girl and it may be a little weird, but I have always loved Star Wars (I haven't wanted to admit this ...

Hiya! Shooting Stars here to review! To be honest, I saw very few mistakes in your story. Great job! :D I really like the opening because it grips you and ...

Hey! I'm Shooting Stars and I guess I'm your reviewer for the day. :D Okay... Here goes. In red is the stuff I changed a little bit. In blue is ...