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Nice story,eager to see some more of ur works. :)

Well done!

Nice try.U have to work a bit on it. Keep writing. :)

Hey nice story.:)

emotion_less:That is a lot of help,I guess u are right about feeling of freedom in this haiku.I'll try to work on it.Thanks. Cassandra:Thanks for the help. xanthan gum:Thanks! :)

Ha! nice confession.

Pretty good! I liked the flow of this para- "I'm going to teach myself a lullaby and perhaps I'll cry sugar tears - they taste so sweet when melted on ...

I have heard of the book skins but I didn’t read it. Soon I’ll be reading that. I never heard of the book which Bobo is talking about. Fantastic Mr. ...

Well Done! Keep writing. -Sayani

No wonder it is the best story.:) Is the state writing contest is about writing a short story,as short as four lines?

Yeah I agree with u(Reas e'lil). Big bro has always been so good to us. Nate has made a family in yws. We all are proud of him. -Sayani.

A Nicely written piece of work.Liked it. Though I would have preffered some puntuation marks in the lines.The whole poem can't be a run on line poem. Keep writing. -Sayani

I like to read Harry Potter more than Lotr,cuz the way J.K.Rowling wrote it, its hillarious,making everything realistic. But in movies I've to say that Lotr is better than HP.

Thank you so much guys for commenting on my poem. :) And thanks bandhu!!(Jacquie) :) I've changed the word 'requisite' to 'necessary' ,hope it is sounding good. :) -Sayani. :wink:

Hmm.. Henry sugar is everyone’s favorite (to those who read it). :) -Sayani.