Shepherd

I'm going to review this piece-by-piece, but I'll leave the grammar and such to you once you start working on a final draft of this! Sandar Ortano leaned across a ...

I love camping! Anyway. I think you have limited yourself a great deal by using "you" as a subject. Because you don't have a defined subject, and must refer to ...

I'm not a huge fan of this poem. Overall, I found the imagery to be redundant and not overly surprising. The idea of using flowers as a metaphorical construct is ...

You know, I couldn't quite get into this poem. I didn't think it was badly written, and I think that your word choice and overall temperment during this piece is ...

Yep, this is a cool little poem. I liked your cadence at the beginning a lot more than what you have at the end, although I think the measure is ...

This is definitely a neat little poem. There are, however, a couple of things that I think you could change to improve this overall. I'm not sure if you are ...

Okay, so you can see that this will need a little work. I think this is probably a rough draft, rather than something that you have really polished, so I'm ...

This is cool! I can tell that a companion of the canine sort inspired this. I would like to see this pulled apart into stanzas, to make it a little ...

Overall, this gives a neat impression, I would say. The contractions seem out of place, given that you have taken a more archaic setting and a more formal style of ...

Your language use here is excellent. I do think that your subject is a little cliched, a little bit mainstream--and because you have chosen to produce a poem that is ...

This is an interesting approach to a common storyline, and I think your take here is definitely worth continuing with. One thing that bugged me a little was the abrasiveness ...

Hm. Your rhythm here is good, and I think you've got a compelling subject. It just leaves me wanting you to explore this a little more. You have the emotion ...

I'm going to go through this grammatically first, with overall critique afterwards. =) Megan crawled through the yard hedge rapidly, her father ' s Swiss army knife in her mouth, ...

Critiquing this bit-by-bit... Gavin’s eyes filled with water as a lonely tear drop ran down his freckled face. This image is terribly cliched, I think. The idea of a single ...

Two quick things before continuing with this review.... Firstly, don't switch to using "I" unless you are going to use it through the whole piece. You probably did this inadvertantly, ...