Shearwater

Hello Rose, Pink here :) Nitpicks leaning against the sculpted metal rails. leaving the distinct aroma of pine lingering. >Leaving and lingering are 'almost' the same thing here. I suggest ...

Hi there! Pink here :) “Hello?” She asks No need to capitalize 'she'. "Hello?" she asks,..... (Does just fine) The man looked up and smiled warmly, while tapping his companion ...

Hi Flyer, Pink here :) So just a few nitpicks... The Darkest Pool of Drowned Souls had chosen me as it's release. The release of a soul from the Pool ...

Hi Anthony, welcome to YWS! Pink here, dropping by to review :) :arrow:Introduction needs some work. It's not the best idea to start a story with a description of how ...

Hi Lauryn, Pink here! >You really want to watch out for repetition. I noticed you repeated a few words quite a bit of times. Remember, the thesaurus is your friend! ...

Hi there, Pink here. Dropping by for a review :D I tried to blink back the tears that were trying to push their way out of my eyes, and stop ...

Hi, Emmy! Pink here, dropping by for a short review :) I woke on my cot, freezing cold. I swung my legs over the side of my cot and felt ...

Hi, Kakagirl! :D Pink here, dropping by for a review! MMm.. I thought, as I sat down on the rusty,old bench licking furiously at my ice-cream. Loose the second capital ...

Hey, Pudin! Here as requested :) Okay, so not much nitpicks. Yay! Description In the beginning, you did a wonderful job. I could see and picture everything brilliantly. I really ...

Hey, All mixed up, Pink here :) Would you look at that, you're luckily my two-hundredth review :D *throws confetti* Okay, no one cares. Back to the review. Alright, I ...

Hey there :) Today a man broke into my castle. my home. Capitalize 'My'. Earlier this hour he torture me, my own utensils and tools used to slice away my ...

Hi Forestqueen, Pink here :) Its like the newsreels, but more life threatening then a black and white screen. Should be it's. I had poured out my heart to her ...

Hi, Pink here! Dropping by to do a short review. Everything in red is what I found that needs some tweaking :) Every day I wonder what I could have ...

Hey Whisper! You have requested me, and here I am :) Alright, let's get started.... I.Characters You characters were quite 2D in my opinion. Your writing is always more tell ...

Hi Danie! Here for the review! Alright, so my first thought was how quickly Asha seems to be picking up this whole vampire thing. I mean, I think it's too ...