ShayM

This poem is so neat, especially the end. Killing the sun and stopping the glow, The moon plots her jealous revenge. Venus and mars cannot intervene, you need to capitalize ...

Aah!finally a poem with meaning, it really makes the reader feel the emotions that the writers trying to convey. one thing though: Emotion has grown cold, Passion all gone lost, ...

Hey there! you wrote this poem well i think, because you used simple words to create in depth emotions. when you wrote: And if I'm not still here, When tomorrow ...

I really liked this piece, and I agree with Shepherd about using "you" in a story, some people don't know how to use it right(that would be me) but you ...

You may not agree with what i thought needed revising, but that all it is a thought. Hope i was able to help you in some way! I finally came ...

It toke me to read it two times to fully get it( guess I am just slow :P) but I really like it! I like the words you used, it ...

Hey there! Most of the things i want to touch up on have already been stated so ill just try in say it in my own words and thoughts. I ...