Shadowstalker

I didn't get it. I didn't really like it either, some parts are good but... Yeah, I'm not one of the religious sort, but to me 'god-breathed' seems a bit ...

Written earlier, but oddly enough, much better than your chapter four. A much better fight scene, well done. My only problem is the reference to March and January. For me, ...

Ugh, okay. First off, the level of ...shall we say events that occured in this -one- chapter should rightly be spread across about three, at least. In my opinion, the ...

I like it, and just to be different and argue with people, I wouldn't change a thing...although it was the last two/three lines that made me like it. For me, ...

Hrm...this is...um. I'm not quite sure how to critique it or anything of the sort. It doesn't have a rhythm (How I hate that word! I'm never sure how to ...

It was um....yes. um. Some parts are good, others are -really- bad...like, the first 3/4 of the second massive stanza thing. That's the main part I didn't like, ironically, the ...

Well written, in the majority, and considering that I haven't read anything else apart from this one scene, fairly good character developement, of Aine at least. One minor complaint though, ...

After scanning through the poem, since it didnt' really catch my eye you know, was rather dull to tell you the truth, one part jumped out at me. In hopes ...

Good use of imagery, well done with that part. They don’t need dark Cellars or attics Only my thoughts And memories. The first part of the poem that actually caught ...

Wonderful. I liked it, riveting, to steal a word. Although, the first part sort of...doesn't really fit in with the rest of your story, you know? Well, not really, it's ...

Yeah....it's bland, it's not all that exciting and the spelling...ugh. Beaken us to come beckon, not sure why it's capitalised either. seagals seaguls, you were right Merv. He covered most ...

I like it, well done. Hehe, you brought out, what I feel, to be the futility of asking an inanimate object something that you really should figure out for yourself. ...

Um...Okay. Long winded, and not all that riveting or curious or anything of the sort. I read maybe half of it and then skimmed to the end. I don't really ...

Not too bad, good meaning behind the poem, or so I believe. But there are a few glitches here and there. A blue bird, a butterfly, a ray of sunlight, ...

Point number one; paragraphs! Dont give the read massively big blocks of text to wrestle their way through. Point number two; CATCH THEIR ATTENTION. First paragraph is VITAL and quite ...