SereneSimpliciT

That is terrible. Yeah, my valentine's day last year was . . . bitter sweet. My boyfriend at the time (same boy) had his wisdom teeth removed while I was ...

Anyola is referring to Maggie, not Sammy XD I'll fix that lol Yeah while reading the chapters over I did notice that part you mentioned about him not answering the ...

There's no snow XD There in what's currently California, near current day Fort Braggs, and it's July. I really need to specify that it appears XD I haven't written a ...

How I love getting on and seeing your name XDD Well then, I'll address the chapter as a whole first; this isn't what chapter 21 was outlined as. Originally Cent ...

Unfortunately, the cursing and slang will not be removed. I understand that to some, cursing is frowned upon, but you have to understand that cursing is part of everyday life, ...

I hope you read the rest of the chapters, I'd love to see what you think! ~Maddie

I hope you read the rest of the chapters cause honestly I don't write action scenes like this much XD Thank you for your input I appreciate it :) ~Maddie

Yeah that's my awkward way of going from 1st to 3rd person. I need to fix it XD

The novel is actually only 30 chapters, but it's in a series. I hope you read other parts! ~Maddie

I try haha Already written chica XD

What exactly needs fixed? You never addressed it XD Yeah, unfortunately the characters in my stories talk like real like people of the same age, so cussing is involved in ...

So yeah, I highly suggest reading the rest haha XD So, basically, the chapter reads as it is because Isugoro just started training, so in a way, it's an intro ...

Yeah she may try to act cool, but she's still technically only an inexperienced 17 year old XD

This story is written from the view of a 20 year old guy. As you're aware, real people around that age do swear a lot and use slang. It's to ...

Change this. I'm sorry, but no one can make sense out of whatever it is you were trying to do. I'll review when I can actually understand what is happening.