SereneSimpliciT

Omg that's great lol Yeah, no one really uses Internet Explorer anymore, do they? haha So, in terms of actually critiquing, I really think you have a strong piece. It's ...

Awe, that was cute lol So, all in all, this is a pretty straightforward poem. I like the way you started, with her coming out of the water, it was ...

Ok, question right off the bat; why is this called "Remembering the Call"? Like, seriously, there's never a call that takes place, well, unless you count that yell at the ...

First of all, I'm gonna say that I love that you did something for 9/11, I didn't get on that day because I normally get depressed by stuff about the ...

Warning: I get a bit tough, but I'm not trying to bash at all. I actually liked this work, despite a certain point brought about. I'm not trying to be ...

Ok, so this isn't going to be a full on review because honestly, I just couldn't bring myself to finish this piece. I was not only distracted by the varying ...

Wait...wait wait wait So you're saying that everyone believes that she killed someone, and NOTHING happened? Uh, nah Either you haven't told us that she was in jail for ten ...

Alright, since you mentioned this to me, I thought I'd at least check out the first chapter. And overall, I will say it wasn't that bad. Although I'm personally not ...

Ok, I don't know what exactly to think about this. At first, I thought that you may have just forgotten to press the enter key so that there would be ...

Why is there only one stanza with three lines? Seriously, that took me out of the piece entirely when I saw it. ((Sorry for sounding harsh from the get-go DX)) ...

Is it bad that I laughed at the part with the cat named Bob? Is it? I feel bad XDD Ok, so besides that, this is a rather depressing story. ...

This is what we call a mindf*** ladies and gentlemen XD I mean holy crap, my brain was so confused by the fifth line of this thing And then this ...

Ok, so technically this is a rhyming poem ((sorry that I'm jumping right into this, I just need to say what I'm thinking before I forget)) but I tried reading ...

Ok I will admit at times I didn't fully understand what was going on in this piece lol But what I did grasp I absolutely LOVE, especially the message the ...

Well then. XD And I thought I was abusive and cruel towards my characters lol Hey Deanie! It's great to see some work of yours for a change. Let's review: ...