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Oops! Sorry that last analogy was backwards -.-* You get the idea though :D

This should probably be in poetry ;)

No problem. Always glad to help :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Well, I haven't done any critting on it because it looks so... :smt119 huge. There's an edit/modify button in the right hand corner of your screen.

Uh, the arguing people were suposed to be the angel/devil thing. :D (I don't know why those popped up) :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

MONKI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is better, but there are still a few things :mrgreen: ** She sat upon a mighty, noble steed. She looked as though she hadn't slept for years. H

Well, you don't have to reveal it now, you CAN reveal it later. :D Just have her react differently, like she's not phased at all by his "Where's Darke Street?" ...

Thank you all for your crits. I will clarify and give more background :D

2. Then you have this guy come up to her with The Killer Unicorn, and he seems unfazed? Instead of the Unicorn and her horse, there was good looking dark ...

“First of all, let’s get a couple things straight. I am not a unicorn. So please stop thinking of me as one. Second, you need to come with me.” I ...

Hmmm... having the flashbacks, and the tale would be too obvious. Have one or the other. If you want your characters to have a sense of humor, put them in ...

No problem. :D:D:D:D I understand. Just add some action. that's all. :D:D :smt068 :smt063 :smt035 :D:D

Good to know. :) Thanks for telling us. :D:D:D

I will crit thise later. Unfortunately, I have some business to attend to :)+:)=:D

Oh, for a title I suggest you use another word meaning 'silent,' or use and antonym, like 'Muse' or something... :D:D:D:D