SeraphTree

You need to space between paragraphs... including dialogue :)+:)=:D When you do that, I will be more than happy to review. :smt035

This piece is really good. The only thing is that towards the end, it's confusing about who is doing what. Just a little clarification is needed there. :D

You need to space between paragraphs. :) As soon as you do that, I'd be more than happy to crit this piece :D:D:D:D:D :smt035

Speech is important for ruling a kingdom and without it you could be easily over thrown ... or considered a demon or witch ;) Soldiers came knocking on doors, looking ...

Hi :D:D:D:D:D:D:D All intruders are to be killed? What the hell is that all about? The villagers just glare straight ahead at me, and I can’t help but shudder a ...

:thud: We have no details here. Where are these people? Is the sky lavender? Is the horse spotted? (These are just examples :D) She sat upon a mighty, noble steed. ...

Okay… looks like I can crit after all. Lawrence blinked the sleep out of his eyes. It was hard to stay awake in an environment as the one he was ...

CHAYONZ!!!!!!!!!! :elephant: :smt039 So good to hear from you! I was beginning to get worried.... :D Tradhalem was much bigger than Rovenhold and metal barred gates surrounded the city, but ...

Okay, I'm back........ sorry about that X( Silence had earned Markali another set of lashings. The smell of the blood covering his back and pooling on the cell floor around ...

V^o^V Atop of a big green hill there was a house. This house was a big house. There where over 35 rooms. Its was enormous. In this house there lived ...

I agree with Gwen. There is so little to go on, we're left very much in the dark. X( Also...... I wouldn't jump in with the statement that 'dragons are ...

I didn't read through it all... :smt011 but I can tell that this piece needs more thought bubbles and dialogue. You said you're tired of it???? Why don't you write ...

First, this sounds WAY too much like Harry Potter. I suggest you change some things. :) William said calmly; as the man turned slowly, still kneeling to fully face them, ...

Hmmm. It's a bit rushed, and in the middle you switch to Reok's point of view. I suggest you drag it out more. Kill us with suspense. That's always interesting.... ...

Okay... Im' back. :D:D I looked to the ground and was not surprised to see a life-size plastic pony prancing about on the grass. “We need your help!” she hissed. ...