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Hello, Itisume! After I'm done with my little nitpicks, I'll go on to tell you what I thought. So, let's get started. Who would’ve known that any events to take ...

Hello, Cyn! Well, you did forget to capitalize the letter 'I', but Reader caught that already. You got your point across, but this is lacking description and that little sprinkle ...

Hello, Tamtam. I don't know how to really review songs but I'll try my best. First of all, this was really good, but I wish I had something to compare ...

Hello, Sierra. Background stuff you may want to know: *Cerian is the MC's arch nemesis *Araminta is the MC's twin sister. *The MC is not so good at swordplay. This ...

Hello, Persephoneia. The movement of her arm seemed almost disjointed as she switched the car into reverse and threw it back without heed, crashing into the neighbor’s overly pruned hedges.. ...

Hello, Hiadel. I'm just going to get my little nitpicks out of the way before I state my thoughts on this. Five million dollars had just flown from the hands ...

Hello, Rascal. Abigail caught the mistakes I spotted, so now all I have to do is give my comments. This was full of emotion and, all around, pretty sad. I've ...

Hello, Mary. The light coming through the window was golden, warming my body from the previously cold night. My body was half covered with the whiteness of the sheets, while ...

Hello, Anne! The last time I saw her was at the eighth grade graduation party. Her bright yellow dress on. This just sounds awkward. Emma Grace , the girl of ...

Hello, Sierra! The door opposite me swung open, and the biggest dragon I had ever seen emerged. Take out the comma. And I couldn't’t look away. Couldn't is mispelled. en ...

Hello, CardDragon. Amanti Bram stared out into the blue sea. The sea Instead of using repetition of sea, you can just change "The sea" to "It". was clear and you ...

Hello, Ofir. This was really well written! I love the plot of this story. At first, I though Becky and Matt were going to be together and then, out of ...

Hello, Inspired. This is really well written and even though the flow and rhythm is a bit choppy, it was still really nice to read. There was a lot of ...

Hello, Ragtime! I love the quote at the beginning of your story, as you can see, I'm a big Peter Pan fan myself. Even though this was short, it was ...

Hello, Quest. When reading this, I feel as if I've walked in on the middle of a Novel or something. This was good, don't get me wrong, but there was ...