Sapphire

Hey! I’ve never read this before but I’m glad I have now! But since I’ve never read it before, that means I’ve never reviewed it before, so this will be ...

You know, this strikes me more as prose than poetry. It's very descriptive and well-written, but the lack of poetic techniques and rhythm lead me to seeing it more as ...

Hi aestar! I really loved the criss-crossing! I thought this was great, but I do have some suggestions for you. I'm going to quote the whole thing and score things ...

I loved this but there were a couple of points that caught my attention: (Sometimes) I think there should be a full stop in there, like: (Sometimes.) Aesthetically, it just ...

I meant to critique this before and only just realised I hadn't! Although now I'm glad that I waited a while because I think it's one of these poems that ...

How bizarre that I could feel sorry for a pair of baby shoes! We get so lonely anymore. This has been pointed out already. Is it 'We get so lonely ...

Hi! I think there is one main point you could consider to improve this poem, and that's having a more consistent structure. If you made sure each line had eight ...

Hey! First off, I'll let you know that on YWS you should post two reviews before posting work of your own, then keep the review to work ratio 2:1 - ...

I'm going to go through this line-by-line. Hopefully you won't think this critique is too harsh, but I think some interesting elements of the poem are being overshadowed by sections ...

You know, despite not fully understanding the meaning of the poem, there's something I really like about it. What confused me about what was actually happening is that the beginning ...

Hi! I liked this, although there are a few things I would change. Sometimes when you get repetition at the beginning of each stanza it can be incredibly irritating, but ...

You know, this might be the first time I got goosebumps reading a poem here. You picked a great subject to appeal to writers! :lol: However, of course, I do ...

I like this! It's much improved, simply with changes to one stanza and the addition of another. As an aside, I feel like this is more lyrical than dramatic. Perfection ...

Hey! Firstly, I think the title should be 'Girls just wanna have fun'. She w a ndered the lonely sodden city streets, the evening’s vain festivities now done. Light caught ...

Me again! :lol: I seem to have developed a habit for reviewing your poetry. I thought this was brilliant and there was only one minor point I'd change, which I'll ...