Samsal

Okay, this story was nice. A bit depressing but not bad. I think that you should describe it more. Describe the what he thought when he came home or since ...

This was really good...quite enjoyable i must say. i could really picture the characters saying those things, although i still think the only thing your stories seem to be lacking ...

yeah well I read both and yes this was really good. I too think that you should describe a bit more.That is the only thing that both part one and ...

hmmmm this was rather this seems to be someone that has some self esteem issues. it is nice, but i wished that you had explain more what was going on ...

okay well it looks like im going to be the first...this poem seems so doesnt need to rhyme and everytime you try to force a rhyme in, it threw the ...

This is a nice poem but it does feel like if its dragging on and on. Listen to OverEasy about the chatspeak trust me I have been eaten alive because ...

yeah i really liked this poem when you first started....you had me and i was with you until the, "my chest is infested with mold" line. this seemed a bit ...

nice was rather depressing...but is probably one of reasons why i liked it. i like your repetition of remember. i agree that the fourth stanza is a bit confusing. i ...

For some we are or I am the one or one of many. this was actually quite good, though i didn't quite understand this line.besides that is exceptional. :)

well it was good for a start. dont sweat it if the comments seem kind of harsh. it's only to help you grow and become better. dont sweat the small ...

this is nice. i dont feel much from it though, but i get what you were you trying to say. the whole he loves me,he loves me not topic. nice ...

your hand on my shoulder and my breathing too fast and too unwell, the concern in your eyes could avert the end of the world. I remember your lips on ...

this is new. good poem. lots of spelling errors though so i suggest that you go back and review your poem and see what could be done to make it ...

this is really something else. this poem brings emotion to me. it is very sad. i like it how it is but i do think that something else could be ...

not bad it was cool to read. it didnt really bring out much emotion from me but it is still great. i do like it alot and i think that ...