Published November 25, 2008
Remember, remember…
Remember me today,
Like you will tomorrow,
When you stand by the stone,
Laying that black rose you’ve searched for,
All over the entire globe…
Remember, remember…
Remember me in a week,
Like you will tomorrow,
When your salty tear turns to silver,
Upon the cold ground,
Where I shall stay…
Remember, remember,
Remember me in a year,
Like you will tomorrow,
Saying goodbye to my frozen cheek,
When my hand won’t touch yours,
I am decaying…
Remember, remember,
Remember me when she grows up,
Like you will tomorrow,
When you hold her in your arms,
And she knows nothing,
Of my burial…
Remember, remember,
Remember me when your time has come,
Like you will tomorrow,
When you promise me
You’ll be by my side soon,
And I won’t answer you…
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nice poem...it was rather depressing...but is probably one of reasons why i liked it. i like your repetition of remember. i agree that the fourth stanza is a bit confusing. i kind of understand that you tried to add a little something to the peom but u didnt quite pull it off. good job anyway!
Oh... how sad and depressing. loved it!
As everyone seems that were rude enough to read but not to review, I will!
Liked the repetition, it sounded well. It flows pretty nice. But you got me confused at the fourth stanza. She? Who is she? Is what most readers will thik. Maybe you should explained in a brief stanza, so that you won't make the poem too long. It seems like the person died, left someone behind. Am I getting this right?
Anyway, I didn't find any grammar mistakes but something could have slipped.
Keep on the good work!