Sam

*sigh* Yeah...you can really tell what came naturally and what I had to push. :P ICKY ICKY! Thankus, snoinky!

Ahh! I forgot something: '“The coffee place, down there,” I pointed to the joint and carried on,' You might wanna say 'I pointed to the place and carried on'. I ...

Welcome. :wink:

Lmao...yeah...that's what I first thought when I read it over. I NEED A DIFFERENT LINE!

Ah yes, here we are again. Got rid of the nos again. It was bothering me, and it's rather repetitive. I was gasping for breath, steaming tears ran down my ...

Oy, that's helpful. :P With Incandescence's reply in mind, I read it again and have to agree 'and it's all i can do to lie down on my bed and ...

Hehehe...I've read a lot of that...but wouldn't have thought of it.

Hehe, thanks guys! Got Animal Farm, 1984, Lord of the Flies, The Red Badge of Courage and Farenheit 451 (not really a 'classic', but it's been popular for quite awhile) ...

3. A little stuttering is okay, but after awhile it gets repetitous. He's flustered, yeah, I got that, but if you use one or two at the beginning, it sets ...

*shrugs* Know any good ones, then, Rei? :D

Meh, my English teacher's really laid back...and I think 1984 was written in the thirties, am I correct?

*pokes* Evil.

WHEE!! Where'dja go? Don't mess with me gi-friend! Yeah...like I said...I typed in all black...couldn't see...:P I shall fix it!

Woah, that's really good for twelve...though what the blip do I know about that? Hehe, I liked it anyway.

Thanks! Whee...I need some inspiration from me to fulfill the incoherency...:P