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Hey, Eleina! You've been around the boards for awhile, but I've been rather antisocial, so...here's my belated 'Hello'. :D SOME THOUGHTS ON DASHES: You can use dashes instead of quotation ...

I've heard through a lot of posts that you think your writing is boring- with lots of description, and very little action. I read this with absolutely no tolerance at ...

Hmm, I'd agree with Claudette- but it might be kind of cool if you put those little paragraphs were you are speaking in present tense in italics. That way, it's ...

After reading two examples (the latter from Snoink's FREAK, of which I'm aware you're a fan), pick which one makes the most sense or is the most comprehensible... CHOICE A ...

Hey! Hmm... this was an interesting piece- a sort of 'what would happen if...?' thing. Kind of scary to read, actually. :P I like your main character (she's pretty likeable, ...

I agree with the bit about the fragments- they're nice, but in moderation. You've got such a great way with words, all they need is some rhythm to back 'em ...

An easy thing to do to make sure that the punctuation/capitalization in your poetry is correct is to mush it all together like a paragraph of a story. Did you ...

Hey! Haven't seen you around before, so welcome to the forums! I started to read your story (beginning at the prologue) and once I got about halfway down the list ...

This does sound quite a bit like House... Quick suggestion though: I thought the patient was hilarious, but usually people who pay a lot of money for a simple consultaion ...

Heya, Myth! I've got to say, I loved this story- your voice, although very steadfast and unchanging, has got a rhythm and a beauty to it that keeps everything going ...

Hey! Haven't seen you around before, but that's probably just me being neglectful...:wink: I quite liked this story- it's got this kid who's recently screwed up his life. Yeah, not ...

Yay! Misty posted! At this point in the story, there is really nothing that's horribly and obviously wrong- no plot holes, no weak characters, so I am going to do ...

Uhm, yeah, you got me hooked- from the front page, actually. :wink: Good job, Claude! It's very rambly (in a good way); very Nabokov- especially in the confession at the ...

I read on your 'Welcome' forum post that you came to YWS for the good critiques...er...*hides collection of 'This wuz gr8! Keep writin'!'* Uhm, no pressure? :P Anyway, welcome to ...

Ooh, Cass...your style is very good. It flows nicely and says a lot in a small space- a grand thing, I assure you. :wink: There was a little confusion in ...