Sam

I heart Luna. Seriously, she's one of the best developed characters I've ever read in a story written in this format- a lighter, YA-ish first person story. She's got a ...

Oh, the last line is so enviably cool... The one thing that I noticed in this chapter was Ajax's transformation from the steady teacher-type to a brash, impulsive warmonger. Huh? ...

And you say this isn't outlined? It fits so beautifully together , in all of its little would take truckloads of notecards in order to figure this out the proper ...

Ah, Jack! I love it! Do you want to know what I love best? ...you don't automatically assume that your readers are in a vegetative state. You use a different ...

I think, since your character is a lot more savvy than the rest of those that go through time travel, perhaps the "Oh, is that so?" attitude is the way ...

Hey, Jack! This was just as interesting and refreshing as the first part- perhaps a little more, because your characters' situation was quite intriguing. Well written, good stuff, overall. Well, ...

Hey, Shriek! I always admire the way you keep your characters so consistent- it's always them speaking, and not Shrieking blabbing on about something. I sometimes think that writers just ...

Hey, Belle! I'm very, very glad to see more historical stuff on the boards- well-written stuff, too. What I do is pretty simple: I pick out a few areas that ...

Hey, Luke! Cool story- you managed to put in a lot of action and a lot of different perspectives without making it clunky or boring. An interesting take, too, on ...

Again, not even a single spelling mistake for me to rant about. Pity. Time-travel shall be interesting, especially as a NaNo...although, it's very hard to do time travel well, so ...

The 'this is so not my day' was quite funny- it held the piece together in that CL-esque, dark way. :wink: Bah. I'm guilty of the one line-critique, I suppose- ...

Hey, CL! Because you're special and because there wasn't anything huge that I noticed, you get a special critique- in bullets, instead of main ideas! Whoopee! Aren't you lucky? :wink: ...

Ahoy there, Jack! Ah, I'd almost forgotten that your fantasy was pretty awesome, too. Mmm. The description in this seemed to incorporate more of your poetry- the line was blurred, ...

Heya, Cass! Ooh...a story about a druggie that's not preachy in the direct POV. Very, very nice. COMEDY AND TRAGEDY: This story is hilarious to me. That's a bad thing. ...

Why, hello there, Snoinkus! I commend you on being able to narrative daytime television without a single Oprah joke. You're a living example of a person with 'major skills'. :wink: ...