SASSYLADY333

I really enjoyed reading this, I think you're an excellent writer. It was like being in a fifties thriller, or some sort of sci-fi movie. It keep interested from beginning ...

Hey! Yes, I am still reading all of your chapters lol. I really liked the chapter two and three. I think mostly everyone pointed out any errors and such. So ...

I saw your eigth chapter up so I thought I'd see what the beginning was like. I love it so far, you put enough into the chapter to keep me ...

So I decided I’ll go along with it all and continue the generations, and I still haven’t understood the fact s directly. I think starting off the first chapter with ...

Wow, this was really good! I love the storyline so far and I'm beginning to like the characters. There are only a few things you could improve. Like in the ...

I think it was mostly fine, you can help yourself more than I can. [ Cause I don't know much about grammar lol] Besides I think the suggestions you made ...

About the last sentence, that is perfectly fine! In narrative writing form follows function. This was awesome by the way. All you would have to do [if you want, I ...

Actually I'm quite impressed! I got to know more about you as I read through your piece. I think you were able to communicate to your audience well. I hope ...

Hmm...the very first thing I have to say is... Well here at YWS we have a rule for new members. We appreciate people to do at least two reviews before ...

OMGosh! This was soooo good! Especially the begining when she's writing the story! I loved how you did that. It's like the beginning of a movie or something. Very creative, ...

Hey this is kind of sort, but that's beside the point. Was there a reason the guys name was cut out? I would suggest just calling _____ "he" "him" and ...

*Shakes her head, jealous* "She's STILL geting reviews..." The other day I saw some people roleplaying Twilight...well kind of like a story board and it was really funny. I immediately ...

Perfection! You really have a way with words, and I was so into your story...Well done! I don't really think there was anything wrong with this. Through all the emotions ...

This is just as intriguing at the first chapter! Very well done, I love how she is irritated a little but not crazy nervous like her vest friend is. And ...

Excellent, excellent! I mean really, it flowed like a hot dog falling through a sweaty bun! No, just kidding ahaha. But honestly it was fun to read, a few things ...