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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Prelude to Suite 1

    I like the description in this piece and your choice of adjectives is really good. The indention is also really effective and I can't see much wrong with this so ...

    Jun 1, 2007
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Rondelet - Through Jealous Eyes

    It's called a Rondelet.

    May 28, 2007
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Rondelet - Through Jealous Eyes

    I would agree with that criticism except that it's the style of the poem I was experimenting with. The format is - 4 syllables 8 syllables repeat line 1 8 ...

    May 27, 2007
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Proverbial Light Bulb

    The rhythm of this poem is really good and I like how it draws the reader in. I love the final line, it's very emotional and the whole extended metaphor ...

    May 23, 2007


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien