Proverbial Light Bulb

This poem was written by Carisha Kelsey but has been deleted for possible publication.

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Rydia
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The rhythm of this poem is really good and I like how it draws the reader in. I love the final line, it's very emotional and the whole extended metaphor of the light bulb is very imaginative.

Erm... Wow. Intense.
Intense, but gorgeous.

I think I understand it, and it scares me... But I like it anyway.

Your imagery is excellent, and I think the way you italicized it finished the effect nicely.

Great job. Keep up the good work!! *trite, overused saying alert*

Muffin

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Lindsaroo
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:O HEY! you posted it! lol. Just so you know, I like it. It sorta lost me when I read it earlier but after I read it agian I understood it. (that was just me not paying attention :p) But I like it Rieda! Keep it up.

*Lindsay*



It suddenly struck me that that tiny pea, pretty and blue, was the Earth. I put up my thumb and shut one eye, and my thumb blotted out the planet Earth. I didn't feel like a giant. I felt very, very small.
— Neil Armstrong