Rydia

Very good! Just two small observations: Crimson waters soaked the earth. What once was bright faded, beautiful things lifeless and diminished. I think a semi colon after faded would make ...

No problem and that's something I only got told when I started studying creative writing at university but I really do think English teachers should bring it up sooner!

No problem and it's okay that you disagree with some of the points, we all have our own individuality of style and it would be really dull if everyone likes ...

No problem! The present tense thing was something I learned at university during my creative writing classes - I used to think if I was writing in past it therefore ...

Certainly! Let me know on my wall when it's done :)

No problem and keep writing, you've got a good knowledge for how a poem should flow so I'm sure you'll get there!

Okay good, that works then. I'm glad I stumbled on to a plot point instead of a plot hole xD

Haha, I'm actually sleeping better than I ever used to but that's the problem - I've been spoiled with lots of good sleep recently and my body is upset at ...

Oh, not sure how I missed that but on a re-read it looks fine! I must have just read it wrong xD

No problem :)

No problem :)

Glad I could help! And that makes more sense now :)

No problem and I'll try to find something more recent after my break :D

Okay that works then xD

No problem! :)