Rydia

I'm liking this one but I wonder where your plot is? It would be nice if you could mould these poems around more than just the painting. Describing what you ...

Hey Kamas! You've got some awesome images here but the lines feel jerky and disconnected in places, you might want to smooth that out. Also, I think some of the ...

*snugs teh Rosey* This poem reads a lot like prose so it should probably be in the Narrative poetry section. You should also look at shortening some of your lines, ...

You have a good start here, a strong theme which is the most important part and a rough skeleton that's just waiting to be filled with words. It does need ...

Hey there! Love the idea behind this poem, it has the potential to be morbidly amusing but you're not quite there yet. There's a few rough edges you might want ...

Beautiful. So long since I've read a poem that plays with the syntax of words so much! You earn the first gold star of the day but first a few ...

Whoooo! I haven't seen an acrostic poem in a while, I love these things! It's an excellent place to start when writing poetry but you should play around with rhythm ...

Hello there! This is such a sweet poem! I've just got a few comments and suggestions for you: I watch the world around me, This is a very vague first ...

Hi there! This is a good start to poetry, writing down thoughts that occur to you while in class but the poem feels a little fragmented and doesn't quite flow ...

Hey Chevy, lovely seeing you ^^ This is a very interesting poem, I'm going to echo Nate and say I love the thought process and the simple feel to it. ...

Hullo! I enjoyed reading this one, I loved the references and the rhythm of it and found it to be a great change from most poetry I've read lately. Here's ...

Thank you for the read. It has been a while since I've found myself wanting to concentrate so carefully on the words of a poem. I enjoyed this, there's something ...

Hey there! Okay so this is a little short for a poem, true. Maybe you're new to poetry? Well let's see if we can turn this into something that other ...

I like the ideas behind this poem but you need to work on your rhythm. It's very jerky at the moment and doesn't flow smooth. Here's a few suggestions and ...

Hello there! Okay so this form of poetry is a good way to kick start the imagination but there has to be something special there for them to stand out. ...