Rydia

Just a few nit-picks first... “That’s okay, Max. No-one always believes me at first.” I found this line a little awkward. Try reading it out loud. It doesn't sound natural. ...

Just a couple of nit-picks for you and then I'll give some more general comments. My head's begin head begins to ache slightly now, but I know that it's a ...

“Have you ever heard yet about the upcoming high school [Sounds very wordy and formal. It would be more natural to just say the dance and your reader would understand ...

Hey, hey! Okay let's take a look at what you have here... Well-dressed figures swirled in the ballroom, for the moment careless to the events occurring in the world outside. ...

Hey hey ^^ Okay so it's actually up to you whether you start a new thread for each chapter or post them all here but I'd advise starting new threads. ...

I'd be only too happy to :) It looks an interesting piece, let's see, where to start... Hilda Doolittle, better known as H.D., was a famous writer who mostly wrote ...

Hey hey! My apologies for the delay but I hope you find this useful :) I'll drop some comments as I read through and then give you my thoughts and ...

Hey there! I used to love these books, I think they're perhaps what introduced me to the wonderful world of plot twists. For once I suppose I'm actually in a ...

Hey there! Harsh and honest you say? I don't know that the two always go hand in hand but I shall keep that in mind ^^ Title I consider the ...

Hey there! Interesting poem you've got here, it sounds almost like a prophetical poem to me in the beginning, the type you might find in fantasy books such as Goodkind's ...

Hey hey! A pleasure to read your work as always ^^ First, I'd like to say that this is very sweet and whoever the recipitent is, she/he's a very lucky ...

Sorry about the delay! I finished the first chapter and then thought I might as well review the other as well before posting. “Move it kid!” Some guy [I dislike ...

Hey Hannah, sorry about the delay. Apparently I have to prove an irritance to my brother in order to borrow his computer ^^ Okay so initial thoughts. You have some ...

Hey there! Well here I am to start reviewing ^^ I'll begin by leaving my comments as I read through and then see if I can summarise with some advice ...

Hey there! So I'm not sure which other you meant but here's a review on this one: “Melanie, stop,” I cried. I was running after her on along a dark ...