Rydia

I've not heard the song but this poem is beautifully written. I think there's a good, strong tone behind it, a lovely use of firm images and some nice sentiment. ...

Hi there! You've got some very strong imagery in this poem and lines or words that really intrigue me, but they're intermingled with poor language or word choice which is ...

Greetings! Now, your title captured my attention because I'm always intrigued by the idea of an imaginary friend and I love all the little stories you hear surrounding them, but ...

Well hello there, an interesting poem you have here. I like the subject and I like some of your words but I think there's not a strong enough feeling or ...

There's actually a section on the site for lyrics, though it's not terribly out of place here. But if you'd like me to move it, just send a PM my ...

Hey there! So I'm not the best with lyrics but I thought I'd take a look and this is pretty cool. With your chorus, you should either just have (repeat ...

Hiya! First impression is that this is a little short for lyrics and maybe you should think about a chorus? Most lyrics have them and I find that they help ...

Hey there Buddy! I thought I'd start with this one since I'm more familiar with poetry :) I like what you have here and agree that it should be preserved ...

You've got a lovely start here, but I think there's something lacking in the flow and I'd like to see you do more with your persona. In the first half ...

Short and compact, I like it. Which is quite the compliment since I'm usually all 'nooo, it doesn't say enough!' with short poetry. I think you could have made this ...

Hi again! Sorry its taken me so long to get to the second chapter, I've had a really busy couple of weeks! But, I'm here now so let's see if ...

Hi again! Sorry this is taking so long, had a bit of a hectic week but I'll try to get you some more comments as soon as I can :) ...

Hello, my love! I really like this. Your language is powerful, your persona is well conceived and it's all put together so beautifully. I have only a few comments to ...

Hi again, dear! Sorry about the delay on this but I decided to review the second chapter for you instead of looking at chap. 1 again. You had some nice ...

Hi there! I thought I’d post my thoughts on the prologue so you have something to read through while I finish reviewing the later chapters :) First thoughts are that ...