Ruth

YES. This is what it's all about.

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Thank you both very much! I did have a reason for putting this into Fantasy, but I'm going to wait and see if anyone picks up on it. But I ...

Okay, I can see how that story would fit the poem, but if you want your readers to really understand it, it needs to be made a little clearer. A ...

Hey! I'm sorry it took so long to get back on to this. Okay. This is definitely improved, and pulled me in much more powerfully. But the first sign I ...

Thanks, guys, I really appreciate it. *works on it* I should also point out that this is based on a true story. I know it sounds unrealistic, I thought so ...

My biggest question to this poem would be, why is it Brother war? Brother means it is related to something - who is related to war? Since it's called brother ...

I am emotionally scarred. I loved it. You are a great writer. I love it! Such an oxymoronic speech! *Exploits self to be a geek*

I'm beginning to think this story is supposed to be a little vague and you aren't supposed to know everything. Give her a hamburger! Since the story is being told ...

I can't promise to be as constructive as my lovely predecessors up there, but I can promise to do what I can. I would love a little more backstory. What's ...

Ooh, can I die, please? Name's Ruth, and I'd like to go out hugging. Thanks! ~Grin

Actually, it is just a self-absorbed pear tree! I know it's stupid, but my Lit teacher insisted on giving us a rather badly drawn illustration and I couldn't get that ...

Thanks for the reviews, after how my poetry normally is I was not expecting it to be recieved so well! Classy, that was the part I struggled with, too. And ...

Thanks for your reviews. I should have made it clearer, perhaps, that I was not in any way taking myself or Rob seriously. I mean, who does? (That is, both ...

Heh, Jiggs doesn't have to laugh at Snoink, but I am. ... *jokes* Don't fire me, Snoink. Please?