Ruth

Hi! You have a lovely idea here. It makes me want to be intrigued by this, if that makes sense, but there's just something stopping me from being pulled in. ...

Hey! Well, this was chilling. Given the theme of the poem, that's a good thing. I was very emotionally involved with this character, you've really demonstrated the effect war(?) has ...

Hey! Okay. I really like the storyline. And the way you've told it to your reader sort of second-hand... that's brave. I think it could work incredibly well, but you ...

Hey! Okay, I really liked this. It's very unique, and I was really drawn in by the emotions of the narrator. There's an air of mystery that I can't quite ...

Huh. I liked that. I really did, it's got a fantastic concept and it's told really well. It's the right length, a little snippet, and it's full of emotion. I ...

What this reminds me of is the bit in the Bible when God destroyed a city, saving only Lot and his family. He told them not to look back, but ...

Oh! I get it. This took a few tries and reading it aloud twice to understand. My translation, and correct me if I'm wrong, is this: Come home Alison, we ...

Hi, sillyducky! I see you're new to YWS. Why not pop into the Welcome Mat and start to get to know people? I'm Grin, and if there's anything you have ...

Sounds like fun, sorry I missed the party. :D About a half... well, no, not a half, more like a third... well, okay, closer to a twentieth of the people ...

Woah. Seriously, woah. You've obviously put a lot of hard work into this, but it's a lot of work to read, as well. There's a lot of action to keep ...

Hi, Scar! *waves* Okay, I'm a little confused about the story of this poem. From what I gather, it's about a girl who slept with the King? It took a ...

Hi, I'm Grin and this morning I shall be your reviewer. I have to agree with Snoink, I love the Savour/Saviour thing you've got going on here, and the separate ...

Lol, Eddeh, lol. I, too, have no intention of reviewing. I just dropped by to let you know I had my first ever Burger King last night, and McDonald's pwns. ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS, it's awesome to meet you. I'm Grin, feel free to PM me if you need anything. I enjoyed this, if enjoyed is the right word. It ...

This is very cute. I really liked it, you described it with the lovely simplicity that myths of that sort are generally told. The grammar criticisms are gone, and you ...