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"Chase sprang awake." Okay, for the record I can almost forgive this because it isn't "awoke with a start". However that doesnt mean you can throw around words like sprang. ...

Alright mate, I clicked on yours because it had no reviews and it's much easier to review those. However it turns out you haven't reviewed anyone else's work yet and ...

I personally prefer the second version over the first by a mile. The use of the various death identities, the reaper/scythe, the reference to pomegranates and persephone, and the imagery ...

Hey Kitty, I like the imagery that continues through the piece, I think you've managed to make the river/ocean metaphor carry through the poem without dominating it detrimentally. This is ...

Ah thankyou all for pointing out some oversights on my part. When I'm talking about Dust not being/symbollising god I'm refferring strictly to the god of abrahamic scripture. I think ...

"I am still here, she said, open the door. " okay if this is speech it needs speech makrs, if it's thought-speech it need to be italicised. "the exact same ...

"thin peasant clothes" hmm, maybe just "threadbare" or "poorly made". "peasant" is a little too much of a contrived exposition. "froze under the icy cobbled " are his feet actually ...

Righto, by 'review not edit' I'm assuming you don't want nit-picky details, but I may be completely wrong. Either way, I'll leave that for someone else. Some things you may ...

"I nodded uncontrollably" Makes sense, but perhaps "I nodded fervently" would fit better? "believing my father let me hold it" for some obscure reason I think you should put a ...

"Said the voice of a woman unseen" "came the voice of an unseen woman" voices do not speak, people speak. similarly it should be "unseen woman" not "woman unseen" "everywhere ...

I loved studying this play, but when our class saw it performed, it was slightly ruined my modernisation. The director had changed the ending to make it more dramatic by ...

"furiously fast thoughts " Never, ever make it obvious that you are *trying* for alliteration. It needs to be natural, though we all fall for this at one time or ...

Very well written, I’m not even sure if this was an error, but it read strangely in my head: “everyone around and Esmee daintily” everyone around them, and Esmee daintily ...

“pondering aimlessly” You can’t really ponder aimlessly. “calm and simple paradise to perch like a cat” Calm and simple paradise; to perch like a cat “Moment of paradise over.” I ...

"Where are you headed to?” Where are you headed? "implying that it was too quiet around the table between the menfolk" although she is doing this, "trying to liven up ...