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Re: crisis
Hey, it's RossLighting here, time to review :) First of all, I know people who have panic attacks. It's horrible to see them in such pain and suffering. I also ...
Jul 17, 2017 -
Re: Chapter 1 -read the prologue for the story-
Hey, it's RossLighting, here to do a review :) First of all, even though I haven't read the prologue, the intro sucked me in. I enjoyed the style of writing, ...
Jul 17, 2017 -
Re: Strength of a Writer
Hi, it's RossLighting, here to do a review :) Firstly, the poem was a good length and I thought it was a good topic to talk about. Is this from ...
Jul 17, 2017 -
Re: Metaphorical Construction
Hi, i'm RossLighting here to do a review :) First of all, I'd never seen one of these 'prose poems' before, so this was all new to me, a new ...
Jul 16, 2017 -
Re: Life Is Full Of Strange Magic (Graphic)
Hi, MrsxCreepyPasta! Time to review your short script! Firstly, in the opening paragraph, you made many questions. Also, may I suggest you use more imagery. Also, you will need to ...
Apr 24, 2017 -
Re: Please Remember Me (Chapters 11-15)
Well, skylnn, hi, and you asked for me to be brutally honest. I'm not normally brutally honest, I'm literally never. I'm too nice. So you wanted it to be brutal, ...
Mar 26, 2017 -
Re: Mirrored
Cool poem. I thought it was a bit too long, and I didn't understand the word 'xenagogue'. Quite surprised you found a rhyming word for that, that was cool. The ...
Mar 23, 2017 -
Re: Wild Hearts.
Great poem, I loved the human imagery used in the poem. Like the part, 'it screams, it shouts.' I loved that part, and I loved how the whole poem rhymed. ...
Mar 23, 2017 -
Re: Founding Fathers
First of all, LOVE the starting quote from the beginning. Its always nice and rare to see a quote In the beginning of poems, and this was perfect. I never ...
Mar 19, 2017 -
Re: Vietnam- A Poem
Wow. Some really powerful stuff. You really seem to care about the Vietnam war, I can tell by the passionate poem. I found the part 'They got nothing of which ...
Mar 19, 2017 -
Re: Play Pretend
Hey Remembrance! I really liked this poem! The wording, the rhetorical questions, the hidden meaning of the story, it was great. It was quite short, but that was fine, and ...
Mar 18, 2017 -
Re: Life As Poet
Hey Royevans! The poem started off well, and with a good start means the poem should be just as good, and it was, good use of words, and I love ...
Mar 14, 2017 -
Re: hand in hand, i go nowhere
Hey anngelalu! Firstly, the poem was short and sweet, with great use of words, which I really enjoyed reading and I think the last part of not being able to ...
Mar 13, 2017 -
Re: Life And Death (Spoken Word Poem)
Hey Ryleigh! First of all, welcome to YWS! I'm Ross, and I'm going to review your poem. I think this is your first story review on this website? Anyway though, ...
Mar 13, 2017 -
Re: Firebreed chapter 2-- Cassy the Killer Queen
Hey AwkwardMeerkat! Time for a review! Firstly, loved the chapter, though it did get a bit confusing at the end. (I'm really sorry I haven't read chapter 1) I was ...
Mar 6, 2017
