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Thanks for the review! We agree that there's lots of dialogue.

Thank you very much for your review! This is actually a HUGE help, and I do realize now that the Four Men scene is VERY much like the Phantom Tollbooth. ...

Very interesting prologue! I think I'll use the YWS S'more Method to make this easier. ;) Graham Cracker: Two guys, Lucas and Gabriel, argue. Lucas begs Gabriel to something and/or ...

Hi! This is an amazing intro! You described everything very nicely, and the opening flowed well. I do think you should add a bit more detail into the first paragraph, ...

Thank you so much! That is a huge help!

Hi! Just wanted to say that this is an amazing intro! I may not be a professional editor, but I sure know a good start when I see one! :) ...

Thank you for your review! I will make sure to shorten the wizard's backstory. You see, CherryScriptAMK and I are trying to publish this story (Shadow), so every review helps. ...

How would you like CherryScriptAMK and I to show the little ones? One last thing, how would I decrease the dialogue? Thank you for your review. Every single one is ...