RoseTulipLily

Thanks so much. This is indeed based in real life just like my other work 'Brother'

You're welcome. That's what everyone on site is here for, after all. We help each other :)

Thanks for the feedback. I'll be sure to follow your advice :)

Thanks so much for your feedback :)

I know I am not the first to say this, but your description are quite impressive. You manage to get the reader's attention with your word choice right away and ...

You're very welcome. Don't worry, I understand. Let me know when the next chapter is uploaded :)

Thanks for following back. Keep writing :)

Greetings! I must say this is an interesting start. You really manage to set up the scene here and convey the feelings of the character. The hairs on the back ...

Looking Forward to it :)

I understand and if there's anything new I can add while reviewing I'll do so. This story is a very interesting concept. I'll say that much ;)

Hmm, that odd, I don't know where those weird 'I%u2019m' and others like it came from. There's an error preventing me from sending the review. I sent a message to ...

Hello and welcome to Young Writers Society! I haven't been here for too long either so I understand how you feel. Let's start with the review now, shall we? :) ...

I doubt there's a single writer who does not have that problem, myself included

Hmm, I really don't have any critics for this. It seems to be a good start. You reveal enough information to set up the story without boring or scaring the ...

This was an okay chapter, I guess, and like the previous ones, it helps set up the story. It would be nice if they were longerm though. Nonetheless, I look ...