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thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

Thank you! I'll work on that imagery.

Thank you!

Thank you Dragonrider!

Thank you so much! this gave me some great ideas! I'll definitely work on that, and you weren't rambling at all.

thank you for this review! I'll definitely work on that! Even as I wrote all the info dump stuff I was thinking "this is way too much stuff to put ...

...? this isn't a poem....

thanks!

That stanza is referring to the stanza before with the fire. Her husband and her two children died in the fire, that's why she was left with nothing. Thank you!

I love haikus, but I've never tried to review one before... Let's see how this goes. Your rhythm is perfect for a haiku. I'm glad you know what you're talking ...

to answer all of your questions as to why it's called "Eden," I would like to say that I picked it because I found it kind of.... I don't, ironic? ...

Oooh! This was fantastic! Is this about sweatshops? because I wrote a poem that sounds sort of like that. Your descriptions were really good. Vivid even. I especially like the ...

Aw :3 thanks!

Thank you!

Thank you for your review! I'll definitely work on those things!