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Hey! Thanks for the review! The person in this poem works in a sweat shop (there were more details to specify this in the original homework assignment, but the rhymes ...

Thanks for your review! and Modern Art = "I could do that!" "Yeah, but you didn't." I'll think about that exclamation point.

What I'm really complaining about here are the people (I've done this, so I know there are others) who just write a poem to put pretty words together, and they ...

Thank you for your review, and the spirit of the poem would not allow for rhythm, and it also called for that language. Thanks! :)

Thanks! It actually had more stanzas, but I realized by then I was getting off topic just to force the rhyme. And you're right, that does need a period. Thank ...

And this is exactly why I posted this! I didn't even notice that, and you are absolutely right. It does not fit. What if I changed those lines to: The ...

Thank you for your review! And I don't quite hear the change in pace for those lines, so we must just read it differently. :)

Thank you for you compliments and your review! :D

Well I did write this poem when I was younger, and I didn't change it... ;)

I agree that the rhyme is pretty forced, but when I reviewed it, I decided that the rhyme added to my point, not take away from it. My point was ...

I am neither with the battle hymn of the republic, nor against it. I am using it for my own purposes. I don't know if that makes sense. But thanks ...

I am neither with the battle hymn of the republic, nor against it. I am using it for my own purposes. I don't know if that makes sense. But thanks ...

I am neither with the battle hymn of the republic, nor against it. I am using it for my own purposes. I don't know if that makes sense.

Thanks for your review! I decided to have the punctuation be not *quite* grammatically correct for the sake of artistic licence and for rhythm purposes. Thanks again!

Thank you! This was a really helpful review! My English teacher pointed out the same thing with the line "Your paper is no longer smooth." But I hadn't considered that ...