Rook

Thanks for your fantastic review, oh wise sage. When I get back home, I'll get to editing this for what you said. Thanks for pointing out things I didn't even ...

This was interesting. I especially like what you did with the last stanza. Strangely enough, having it not rhyme when you write with sentences ending strangely is sooo much easier ...

Thanks for your review! I edited it a bit, if you want to look at it again. ^_^

This is a great review, what're you talking about. XD I was actually thinking as I was trying to develop the character of Jay that his main thing (and the ...

Ooh those sound like great ideas. One thing though, if his nickname was always Jay and he introduces himself as Jason, how would Shep know his nickname... or maybe he ...

Thanks for your review! I edited it a bit, especially Jay's backstory.

Okay. I think I'm done editing the first chapter. I'm a lot more satisfied with the beginning now. But I feel like I ended weaker. I really wanted to get ...

lol I guess I had mythology on the brain. I seriously never even noticed that. I edited the prologue a bit, now I'm starting the first chapter whoohooo

Also... did not know there was a word limit. xD

And Thanks for your wonderful review! I'm probably going to change the name Troy (yes I was implying that he doesn't pay attention much in school), but I didn't even ...

When I went to sleep last night, I replayed this story through my head and realized it was seriously lacking in substance. I'm gonna edit it thoroughly now. Stay tuned. ...

looooooooooooooooooooool

Wait. I don't get the title. And that's like, a fifth of the poem. Is it like, vowels, (a.e.i.o.y.o.u.) but then the letters wouldn't be in that order... Or like ...

lol cow

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