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Yeah, mags is right, but thank you for your review anyway. ^_^ And thanks for the compliments.

Thank you for the review and the compliments! For the first one, how about, "but when I stood again upon that shore?" I think I'm going to keep the second ...

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You're all right. All of you. I was inspired by both the merchant of venice, the led zeppelin song, and the general phrase. Yes, the world likes to copy itself, ...

...where? I've never seen (or read) LOTR except for the hobbit. :o

This was very helpful! I edited it, and now it's much better. ^_^

Thanks for your review! Yeah, I'm actually aware of these problems AS I'm writing it, but I'm so inexperienced with writing novels that I just write on. I don't even ...

I can't even.

Ah okay. It was either about that or not about that. Apparently it was. Thank you for clearing that up. ^_^

No, you didn't sound stupid. I actually didn't realize that could make it flow better. And it does! Thanks for pointing that out. And I feel like the end needs ...

Yes, I was thinking much of the same things you were.

Thanks for your continuing reviews! :D Thanks especially for the thing about chapter 3. Yes, it's ch. 3. I'll fix those typos. There'll deffinitely be more action in the next ...

Erm. Don't mind the little green marks under the commas or the "to" that was supposed to be "too." I'll fix those in a bit.

Oh shoot I forgot the picture. heh. The scales are like, fish or snake scales. Doesn't matter what color, it's a metaphor from the bible. This was a poem about ...

I actually though the "Oh awkward" or whatever you had there worked well. It's just something I'd mutter to myself. I liked it there.... but do what you want. ^-^