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Thanks for your review~ There are a few things I don't understand though. Why did you put a "that" in the first quoted part? What's wrong with the vessels? I ...

Cabot just suffered from a severe infection along with all of its symptoms, including delirium. Don't tell me you're never confused when you're super sick, or woke up from a ...

Thanks for your review anci! I totally forgot that Salim would never use those kinds of words. I was thinking along the lines of "hey, he's smart enough to doctor ...

Oops that part where salim looks at it and looks confused should actually be Shep. Heh. I hate names that start with the same letter. XD Cabot is in a ...

Unfortunately for you, I agree that this ending was horrid. I couldn't force myself to write any more, however. My muse was being strangled quietly in the corner and I ...

In my experience, I think it can go either way, but I find that the lyrics make a lot more sense when you write them first. That way, you're centered ...

it feels as though I'm late in coming to the party, but I'm not too late you're not late if you're the first one to show up, mate. Wait, so ...

*stares at wikipedia* *blinks* Okay then. XD I guess I could see how an ocean wave could be like that, but beyond that, I'm not grasping the concept of loci. ...

I like memory better than misery. Good choice!

Thanks for your review! I really should edit my first chapter-- even though I was going to hold off most editing till the end-- just so I can start off ...

Man, if microsoft word was still loaded onto this computer, none of that would have happened. *kicks wordpad* >:[ Anyway, thanks for your compliments.

But my main character isn't actually partaking in any of the action. He's to wimpy for that lol. What should I do if I just have a bystander's perspective? And ...

I don't know how to write fight scenes D; I'll have to practice or something. I knew how bad that scene was while I wrote it but I didn't know ...

The notes aren't really supposed to be read. :p I left them legible in case people were interested, but they are really just supposed to look like mindless handwriting.

Perhaps come back to it when you're further away from the emotion in it? Or one day when you're feeling emotionless in general. :P