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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Tightrope

    This.. Is.. Epic.. Seriously, it is. I really love how the emotions seem to flow out. It is very dramatic and emotional. I absolutely love it. The word choice and ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Imagination

    *fires up chainsaw* Hy! First of all , yeah , it did sound like a song. And without background music, you cannot really review lyrics to the max, but the ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Place

    Taking out a few spelling and punctuation issues, the poem is quite good. You captured the scenery quite well, but still, I believe more can be done. You haven't really ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Religious

    Hello. This is quite interesting. When I first started reading, I thought it would be just another rant on society, but I really liked how you wanted so startle emotions ...

    Jan 6, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Tears of a Broken Soul

    Hy LifeTime, First of all , I personally like minimalistic writing, but maybe this is a bit too minimalistic. You evoked powerfull emotions really well, but you have just let ...

    Jan 6, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Fall

    Hey Lil_Pau and Happy New Year to you too. First some structural changes. Winter laces the branches of the skinny, dry guardians along the dust and leaf-lined street; a gust ...

    Jan 6, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Dawn

    Very nice. I love it. The flow you established is great, I read it very easily. As in scenery , you've described it very well, inside and outside , very ...

    Jan 6, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Rebel Teen's Sister*EDITED*

    It is good. The feelings it evokes are really strong , but are sometimes too mixed up , and I really can't make out what is really happening. The structure ...

    Jan 6, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Mad As A Hatter

    I really like it. It didn't specifically bring up any feelings, but you've described the chaotic scenery and the atmosphere perfectly. I don't know about that coloured text or the ...

    Jan 6, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Whispers of Rebellion [Locked for Spamming]

    It is really good. :) I love that you treat the problem of change. That is my concern too. I think you really touched a soft spot with this poem. ...

    Jan 5, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Fight

    This is not actually poetry, due to the way you have written it. But if rearange it , it will become a good poem. You really evoked a lot of ...

    Jan 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Fragility

    Yes. Keep it going. :) I just love how you pictured the whole scene and the very sweet and kind of less obvious emotions you brung up. You could have ...

    Jan 4, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Dear Lucy

    You are sick. Sick, sick, sick! I loved it. I really felt everything that gardener felt when he saw his wife.. When he red the letter. That is the thing ...

    Jan 4, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: One thing

    There was one tiny detail that kept me going.. That little tiny [ that doesn't sound right ] detail , so cunningly put there to keep the reader reading. Well ...

    Jan 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Without You

    What a wonderful declaration of love. It is pure raw emotion that you evoke. That is what makes the poem special and notable. Believe me that I really had to ...

    Jan 4, 2011


A beautiful funeral doesn't guarantee Heaven.
— Haitian Proverb