Riedawriter23

Ooo this was very complementary to your last one! I think I'm definately gonna follow this along. I loved your stereo-types, the way you made this sound like an actual ...

Ah I love it! I knew it was going to be something exciting I just knew it. Everyone of these things is something different and this new perspective that you ...

I sort of liked this. Your metaphors were great I just feel like more feeling is needed in this. Not really feeling but more description I guess I should say. ...

The structure was sort of bad, you were missing words in places, and you also (I hate this) used a lower case "I" for most of your words where it ...

This is very creative and I can tell you put much work into it. I'm a lover of everything magic so I could really relate to the words you used ...

I really liked this. I loved the two different personalities you had and how you kept the confusion going throught. Also very nice ending. The only thing I would suggest ...

This needs a lot more body. It had a nice border but you need to fill it. The last line was sort of a surprise I didn't realize you were ...

This was really nice. Very good visual image the only thing I would work on is parting your lines. It looks much better when your lines are separated fromeach other ...

I thought this was very beautiful. The words flowed really nice and you had a great image in all of them. The description put out a wonderful perspective and the ...

This was really nice in the beggining when everything resembled a metaphor but afterwords I think you became too close to the monster subject. If you added more similies then ...

I really enjoyed reading this. It was full of description and passion and I could tell the whole time that you really cared about the subject in which you were ...

I really liked this besides the point that it the two stanzas were so different. They were reading around the same subject but it would have been more clear to ...

This was good esspecially for your first poem and at such a young age. I hope to see more advanced versions of this poem though. Fix through the grammar and ...

This is good in a sense, but it's a little bland. If you could just spice it up and bit and clear you message to the reader up this could ...

That was Amazing! Honestly I didn't know that past was there. I didn't know that Jon and Kyle were together that makes me think back at how much more interesting ...