Riedawriter23

I liked this poem, I think without the "little girl" part it could be seen as not creepy. Lol, it's just that someone who loves someone else in that way ...

I agree, some imagery would really improve this poem. Your meaning is already clear and the rhyme is beautiful. Though the last two lines sort of catch me off guard ...

Dude, he punched Jon. I_okay I didn't think he's actually do that. I thought some Kyle feelings would take over, apparently not. Lol. And I still didn't find out what ...

Gah, what's the name! lol. I loved the Kyle/Jonness, especially when they're being so cute towards each other. I love Jon's little moments. "Me?" Kyle said incredulously. "What was that ...

This was really good! The idea was nice the dialouge was great and the characters were interesting. The beginning to me though (when she was going into the ambulance) was ...

I think is my favorite one so far! The remains WERE getting a bit nasty but...psh, I could handle it. Kyle was being freakin hilarious. He's needing Jon a lot ...

*sigh* More Kyle/Jon. And I'm glad that Kyle is starting to realize that he's losing Jon a little. I noticed that he was getting a little bad-boyish again. I hope ...

Well...Trent and Jon aren't that bad. I thought it was going to be horrible watching his feelings even going for someone else(they haven't really but it seems like they will) ...

*gasp* A Kyle/Jon fight! And those were low blows from both of them. I need to know what Kyle did! I have a feeling that I'm not going to find ...

For a second I thought that her eyes were going to start leaking from her skull and that she was going to go choke Kyle. Lol, I can understand why ...

*sigh* The Jon/Kyle-ness is so wonderful! Though...I could have sensed flirting from Jon, he did ask Kyle if they were on a date afterwords so, that's good. And I loved ...

Mike Reynolds, star of the Dorrison High Varsity Team, was scared out of his mind. Lol, good beginning. Scared that Aiden’s injury might be fatal, scared of the wiry bastard ...

A delicate kiss made with caressing lips, The first, and then the only one. A special, everlasting moment, And then, why did it die? **This is a lot of telling ...

I am proud to present the first chapter of the third and final novel in the Order of Atlantis Trilogy. Enjoy and feel free to devour it :) Chapter 1 ...

There was a lot of telling in this instead of visual. It was beautiful but I think that some of the rhymes were forced and therefore jumbled the actual meaning. ...