Reyu

Don't mind them talking about cliches. It's ok sometimes. I do have one question... Why did you not try to create any sort of character association? This almost sounds like ...

My first and only bump.

I plan to have the next one up later tonight. Also, don't be afraid to chat here :) I appreciate all forms of criticism even the mean stuff. ~Reyu

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Choppy. And I will assume griff is telling the truth about "what NOT to do"

Like an angle with burning wings. I think you mean 'Angel', instead of 'angle'. :D I need to read more before I can come to any exact conclusions. Make sure ...

Questions? Concerns? Harsh Criticisms? Parts you liked? Parts that sucked? The story sucks? I hate you as a writer and a person in general? Anything? ~Reyu

Yes, Due South is related.

Heh heh... Brilliant... last part is a little rushed though. I didn't notice any grammatical errors, but then again, I wasn't looking! I was focusing too much on the story ...

Ok, I understand now. He had already found "it" before telling his story to the reader. I like to think of this story as my character sitting infront of a ...

"I thought he had already found it?": He finds it about three paragraphs down LoL And my question remains: is he still looking for it? The beginning is present, and ...

Epic Poetry Concern: Yes and no. This story is slightly poetic because I chose it to be so. This is not, however, going to be an epic poetry. "Tears of ...

I guess I could point out the difference between this and Kenshin, but im not going too. I concider it an honor that my work reminds you of such a ...

Next installment coming in three days :)

Whoa. Okay-do you realise your rant was longer than the actual story? Not that, that matters- i personally love to rant :lol:. I've gone over the story and fixed the ...