Reida

This story is really fun, reminds me of "Ella Enchanted" and other stories like it. I especially love the way you introduced her future fiance: "there was a shadow being ...

Wow, this story is really exceptional. I love the line from Mimi about being addicted to centuries-old champagne found in Benjamin Franklin's cellar and the opium grown by nuns, etc. ...

I think it's really a great beginning. You've got a girl mesmerized by a handsome, seductive guy, she's seems to want to struggle against him, but can't. She is helpless ...

I think your story is fascinating. I love how it begins and then ends with "I'm becoming a monster." Powerful stuff. Really well written. I can see this as a ...

I think your story is marvelous and is bursting with merit. But the beginning was very confusing for me. You should continue writing and consider sending your stories off to ...